To tango with life

PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

The sun slid behind the clouds, then slid right back out as if dancing a tango with various admirers. My heart joined in the merriment and jiggled too.

In a few minutes I would meet him. Mr Greaves. I closed my eyes and willed it to be good news. All these years of wondering, questioning my existence could end today.

Mr Greaves beckoned me to enter his office. “I’m sorry, Alana. Your parents died three years ago.”

His next words pulled me back from the edge of a black abyss, “But you have a brother.”

95 words

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Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by the lovely Rochelle, a flash fiction challenge to write a story in 100 words or less. Click the frog to read more flash fiction.

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  1. neilmacdon avatar
    neilmacdon

    you got three loops of the roller coaster into this – up, down and up again. That’s some achievement in 100 words!

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      😁 Well the image was quite evocative for me. Kind of wistful and nostalgic. Thank you Neil!

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  2. writelindy avatar
    writelindy

    I agree with Neil. So much emotion in one short piece. Well done.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you for reading! It was a fun piece to write too.

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  3. rochellewisoff avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Fatima,

    I love where the prompt took you. So much story and emotion in few words. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you Rochelle. The picture signified hope to me so went with that. 😊

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  4. Dale avatar
    Dale

    I have to agree with the others! That was indeed a roller coaster ride of emotions. So well done!

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you Dale. I can only hope you enjoyed the ride. 😊

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  5. Tamal avatar
    Tamal

    Great Story

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you Tamal!

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  6. Magaly Guerrero avatar
    Magaly Guerrero

    Bittersweet, in all the sense of the word…

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you Maglay for reading! I hope you enjoyed it.

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  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    Love that there was some good news in the end.

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  8. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover avatar
    Life Lessons of a Dog Lover

    Great imagery and a lot of emotional punch packed into this story. I really liked this.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you !!

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  9. gahlearner avatar
    gahlearner

    The excitement comes through so clearly. Shattered hopes and then such a wonderful surprise.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you for stopping by and reading and for your wonderful feedback!!

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  10. Michael Wynn avatar
    Michael Wynn

    The hope and joy at the end was exhilarating and made me feel for her

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  11. neelwritesblog avatar
    neelwritesblog

    This is damn good story that you wrote. I love how you went took us up and down and then like a swivelling yo yo.

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  12. Rommy avatar
    Rommy

    Ambitious! (taking the time to set up the metaphor that set the stage for the story). But you got both ideas represented within the 100 word limit. Nice!

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you for reading Rommy. Luckily it worked out!

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  13. michael1148humphris avatar
    michael1148humphris

    Nicely done.

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  14. goroyboy avatar
    goroyboy

    Shifting emotions. Wow. So romantic at first then tragic and finally a to be continued? Thanks for the ride

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Life is a roller coaster sometimes. And never goes exactly as planned or as one hopes but somehow works out. Thanks for reading!

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  15. Clare Hempstead avatar
    Clare Hempstead

    So many emotions in 100 words. I like the glimmer at the end. Hope the outcome is a happy one.

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  16. Snow's Fissures and Fractures avatar
    Snow’s Fissures and Fractures

    What a story! Nicely done.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you!

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