Candy’s crush

PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot

Few people peppered the diner. Candy preferred it this way. Quiet and intimate. She slid into a booth by the window, checked her watch.

They met here everyday at eleven. It was her secret.

Across the street she watched him leave his office. Her breath caught in her throat as he entered the diner. She loved the grey suit he wore today. Complemented his eyes. Deep blue. At the counter she knew he was ordering a cappuccino. Take away. His eyes roamed the diner not really settling on anything. Or anyone.

They met everyday at eleven. It was her secret.

100 words

***At the risk of being a stalker, Candy pursues her love interest from a quiet corner of an old diner. Written for Friday Ficitoneers hosted by the lovely Rochelle. Check out her blog where you may see more of her writing and books. Thank you to Roger Bultot for the this week’s photo prompt.

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  1. Claire Fuller avatar
    Claire Fuller

    Ahh, unrequited love. Nice.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you Claire! Thank you for reading too, good to see a new face in the comments 😊

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  2. neelwritesblog avatar
    neelwritesblog

    Stalking, remote handed. Nicely done.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you Neel. 😊

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  3. rochellewisoff avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Fatima,
    I love this! That really is a secret meeting. Well done.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you Rochelle! Thrilled you enjoyed it.

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  4. Bryan avatar
    Bryan

    Shhhh she loves him from afar but will kill him up close and personal.
    BTW’s I freaking love the header for your blog that wall of old books really cool and breath taking.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Hi Bryan. She could be a stalker or just an infatuated young girl. And I took the photo for the header in Venice. I don’t know if it’s a store but was just a doorway from a side street. Was so intriguing! Thank you for reading too😊

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      1. Bryan avatar
        Bryan

        I’d should have gone to Venice when I was Italy. I went to Florence instead. No regrets… kind of. Still Roma is one of my favorite cities ever.

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      2. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
        Fatima Fakier Deria

        Next time I go I will do the Florence – Roma route. They sound amazing. I was in the north Torino – Milan – Venezia. Torino was my favourite. A touch of German there. Beautiful places.

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  5. neilmacdon avatar
    neilmacdon

    Just gorgeous. I loved the twist

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you Neil!

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  6. Kecia Sparlin avatar
    Kecia Sparlin

    Nice.

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  7. Iain Kelly avatar
    Iain Kelly

    I’m not sure who has the bigger problem out of these too – her, or possibly him if he ever changes his routine! Great take.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Ha! True!

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  8. michael1148humphris avatar
    michael1148humphris

    He needs to get a little more street wise for his own health.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      He does seem a bit in the clouds if he can’t notice the same woman in the same diner everyday at eleven!

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  9. jellico84 avatar
    jellico84

    Love it. Leaves me wondering what would happen if she actually spoke to him. Good story.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you 😊 glad you liked it!

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  10. Mrs. Completely avatar
    Mrs. Completely

    I loved it! Nice job.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you. And thanks for reading 😊

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  11. Sascha Darlington avatar
    Sascha Darlington

    Well done. She must fade into the background if he never notices her, which is kind of sad.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      It’s great you picked up on that part of her. She never takes a risk and goes unnoticed… Thank you Sascha.

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      1. Sascha Darlington avatar
        Sascha Darlington

        You’re welcome. 🙂

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  12. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover avatar
    Life Lessons of a Dog Lover

    Nicely done. I could feel her anticipation and didn’t expect the twist at the end.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Yes, the sad lonely twist. Thank you for reading!

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  13. Christine Goodnough avatar
    Christine Goodnough

    Maybe he’s happily married or attached and she’s dreaming. And sometimes dreams are better than reality. 😉

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Sometimes dreams can be so much better than reality. 😁 reality bites. But we need dreams to help us create a better reality don’t we? Thanks Christine.

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  14. Keith's Ramblings avatar
    Keith’s Ramblings

    Wishful thinking? One day perhaps. Neat little tale.

    Click to read my Friday Fiction

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      There is always that one day, maybe. Thanks Keith. Looking forward to reading your post.

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  15. Liz Young avatar
    Liz Young

    Poor Candy – and a clever pun in the title!

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you Liz 😊

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  16. Michael B. Fishman avatar
    Michael B. Fishman

    I thought this was a great little story! I know you were limited to the 100 word count, but I think this is an idea that would really benefit from some more words that would develop your main character and while still being a flash fiction piece would be a great story to try and get published.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you Michael. Great feedback. I’ll consider doing just that.

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  17. granonine avatar
    granonine

    Good one! Poor Candy.

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you !

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  18. M. K. Waller avatar
    M. K. Waller

    Maybe tomorrow…

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  19. Michael Wynn avatar
    Michael Wynn

    She should talk to him unless she’s satisfied with things the way they are

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  20. Dale avatar
    Dale

    I absolutely love this, Fatima.
    It makes me think of “While You Were Sleeping” with Sandra Bullock…

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    1. Fatima Fakier Deria avatar
      Fatima Fakier Deria

      Thank you Dale. Sandra Bullock was hilarious in that movie. And she did admire him from afar too in the same way.

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      1. Dale avatar
        Dale

        Indeed!! So I don’t see anything sinister in your story!

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