Unholy racket

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This was his place. A sanctum of peace, serenity and love like no other. On top of a mountain overlooking the fields. Cloudless days allowed the horizon to kiss the earth. Today, the clouds rolled at his feet below the mountain peak. Glowing pink and yellow. He extended one foot to dip into it when a loud banging noise stopped him.

His eyes flew open. Noddy, his labrador jumped excitedly towards him and licked his face. Behind him tottered his toddler, squealing and snatching at the dog’s wagging tail.

He sighed. Five minutes of meditation would have to do.

99 words

Hope you enjoyed this attempt at flash fiction humour. Those with small children and hyperactive pets suffering from separation anxiety may relate to this somewhat.

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle-Wiesoff Fields. The challenge is to write a full story in 100 words or less.

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  1. neilmacdon avatar

    That made me laugh, Fatima

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  2. Iain Kelly avatar

    I know all about toddlers and trying to get 5 minutes peace! Good fun 🙂

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  3. James McEwan avatar

    Finding peace on the mountain side is not easy. Nicely done.

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  4. pennygadd51 avatar

    I liked that rather a lot, Fatima. I love how the description of the scenery turns out to be visionary rather than physical. I enjoyed the way you brought the dad back to earth with a bump.

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  5. Keith's Ramblings avatar

    Five minutes is better than nothing I guess!

    Click to read my 100 Word Story!

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  6. rochellewisoff avatar

    Dear Fatima,

    Delightful piece. I had children and pets so I could relate all too well.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  7. jillyfunnell avatar

    Nicely written, Fatima, and it made me smile.

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  8. anuragbakhshi avatar

    Dipping one’s feet into a cloud, how lovely!

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  9. granonine avatar

    Reminded me of fat little fingers pushing under the bathroom door when my kids were small. No rest for the parents of toddlers 🙂

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  10. Dale avatar

    Ah yes… those were the days… though I would have thought that at 18 and 20 they would be quieter. Not so much 😉

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  11. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) avatar

    Five minutes is better than nothing.. 🙂

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  12. lisarey1990 avatar

    I love this story. The dog is so sweet.

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  13. larry trasciatti avatar

    Meditation is important but practical reality always insists upon beckoning

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  14. Sascha Darlington avatar

    Very nice. The opening paragraph has some beautiful description.

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  15. athling2001 avatar

    The joys of parenthood. This, too, shall pass.

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      It’s funny to look back and laugh, not so funny at the time.

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