Rendezvous in the woods

PHOTO PROMPT © Karen Rawson

He gazed at the delicate line of her neck, tracing with his eyes along her collar-bone.

“Josh, are you listening?” Carrie cocked her head to one side, blue eyes sparkling, blonde hair flowing with the breeze.

“Huh? What were you saying?” He slipped his hand into his pocket.

“So you always come here?” she looked at the bubbling creek, and bare trees.

“It’s better in the spring.” He tried not to think of the other women.

She shivered. “It’s cold.”

He drew a blade from his pocket. Only the trees heard her screams, but they would never tell.

98 words

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Write a story in 100 words or less. Thanks to Karen Rawson for this week’s prompt which inspired me to write my thriller-date-gone-horribly-wrong flash fiction.

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  1. Iain Kelly avatar

    Brutal, I wonder if her question about him always going there implies previous victims… Chilling.

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Ha! We were commenting on each other’s posts at exact same time! 🙂 His thoughts about other women implies the same serial-killer background.

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  2. trentpmcd avatar

    Hmmm, other women implies this has been done before…

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Our man here has a dodgy past for sure.

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  3. neilmacdon avatar

    Some lovely writing there, Fatima

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Thank you, Neil! 🙂

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  4. pennygadd51 avatar

    You’ve written this very skilfully, with nice foreshadowing at the beginning, and some description that shows Carrie is attractive and enlists our sympathy for her. The denouement is suitably brutal.

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      I have to thank the word count for the brutality of the denouement. Any extra words and I may have continued unnecessarily. I’m glad you could connect with Carrie in so few words. Thank you, Penny.

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  5. Susan A Eames avatar

    Yikes – that was very chilling! Nicely done.

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Thank you, Susan! Chilling was what I was aim for.

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  6. Dale avatar

    This picture sure has brought out the killer. And yours was quite cool about the whole thing. Poor girl has no clue.

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      I blame TV shows for associating this image with killers in our minds. On another level, it could be quite serene. Yes, my MC is very sure of himself.

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  7. lisarey1990 avatar

    Chilling. Great twist.

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Thank you, Lisa. 🙂

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  8. Dahlia avatar
    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Thank you, Dahlia.

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  9. jillyfunnell avatar

    Really chilling take on the picture. He’s done this before then.

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      He definitely has had practice over the years!

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  10. Keith's Ramblings avatar

    Another one bites the dust – or mud in her case!

    My FriFic tale is called Solace!

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Ha! Poor girl.. Thank you, Keith.

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  11. rochellewisoff avatar

    Dear Fatima,

    That was brutal. Dare I say, nicely done?

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      You may dare away in this case 😉 Thank you, Rochelle.

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  12. Sandra avatar

    Very effective. He sounds practised at his art.

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      An art only he appreciates. Thank you, Sandra.

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  13. Clare Hempstead avatar

    Not quite the rendezvous she was expecting – or many before her!

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  14. granonine avatar

    Aaagggh! Three homicidal maniacs in a row! All spooky, all scary, all really well written:)

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