Out on a limb

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Cole didn’t know why he thought it was a good idea to escape the group, climb a palm tree and take his client’s call there. He could have gone to the men’s toilet or some other place behind closed doors.

Doubling as a secret private investigator was becoming difficult to manage. When he returned to the group, his friend (and business partner) was convinced he was securing some secret deal without his knowledge. And his suspicious wife demanded to see his phone. He smiled inwardly in resignation as they berated him. Who said it would be easy?

97 words

I’m a huge fan of the new Magnum PI series. In this case, my MC has just started his new secondary career and decided to do it in secret.

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsOut. Write a story in 100 words or less.

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  1. neilmacdon avatar

    Climbing to the top of a palm tree may not, in retrospect, have been the most clandestine way of taking the call

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  2. Abhijit Ray avatar

    It is not easy to get signal, unless one climbed a tree. While friend / partner may be persuaded, wife can be a tough cookie. More so if the client was a lady. Why was he hiding his profession? Did he suspect his wife or his partner or both?

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  3. rochellewisoff avatar

    Dear Fatima,

    You kind of leave this reader out on a limb wondering who the client is and why he has to climb a tree to talk to him/her. Not that this is a bad thing. Always leave ’em wanting more. Well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. pennygadd51 avatar

    Out on a limb is quite a good place as long as you’re out of earshot from the ground. You have a nice clear view of anybody who might approach too closely. Much better than the men’s toilet I should say!

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  5. DB McNicol avatar

    Ah, I liked it and wanted to read more…
    I’m also a fan of Magnum PI, both the old and the new!

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  6. granonine avatar

    Well, of COURSE his partner and his wife are going to be curious.

    Fun story.

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  7. Iain Kelly avatar

    It’s not the same without Tom Selleck’s moustache 😉

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  8. Sandra avatar

    I rather think he’s attracted some unwelcome attention to himself. As you say, the men’s toilet might have been a better bet.

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