Doctor on call

PHOTO PROMPT © Sandra Crook

The call came in the dark hours of the morning. Doctor Worthington drove in the pre-dawn winter mist to the abandoned train station.

He found Matthew waiting for him, grumbling as he looked about nervously, “Hurry, we don’t have much time.”

“Sorry. Came as soon as you called.” He tried to match Matthew’s brisk pace as they walked to a discarded carriage. They pried open the rusty doors. Inside, a corpse laid flaccidly on black plastic sheets on the floor. It still looked pink-fresh. Hours old maybe.

“You have ten minutes, doctor. Harvest everything.”

95 words

Talk about a side-hustle for this doctor!

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Write a story in 100 words or less. Click the frog to submit your story.

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Responses

  1. dragonwarrior07987 avatar

    A great take on the prompt! Loved it! ❤

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Delighted that you enjoyed it, and thanks for reading.

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  2. neilmacdon avatar

    That was a great twist at the end

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Thank you, Neil.

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  3. rochellewisoff avatar

    Dear Fatima,

    Wow, that wasn’t at all what I was expecting. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Thank you, Rochelle.

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  4. Darnell Cureton avatar

    Fantastic story! I have a vision of the doctor ripping and slashing to get to the organs!
    Well done!!!

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Ripping and slashing in a hurry! Thank you, Darnell.

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  5. Iain Kelly avatar

    Wow, wasn’t expecting that! Hope he is at least going to put the organs to good use!

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      They will be sold on the black market, unfortunately for illegal organ transplants.

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  6. Russell Gayer avatar

    I bet they’ll sell for a good price on the open market.

    Just a bit of critique, I noticed you used the word “abandoned” twice. Once in regard to the station and again describing the carriage. You might consider substituting another word in one of these places. Just a thought.

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Crikey! I did. Thank you, Russell for that feedback. I’ll do that.

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      1. Russell Gayer avatar

        Discarded was a perfect fit.

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  7. anuragbakhshi avatar

    Absolutely loved that twist. Brilliant!

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  8. Sandra avatar

    Excellent story! And a twist in the tale.

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Thank you, Sandra.

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  9. Keith's Ramblings avatar

    A brilliant take Fatima – I certainly did not expect that ending!

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  10. bearmkwa avatar

    Interesting twist to the prompt. Murder on the train.

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  11. Liz Young avatar

    Hours old? There won’t be much worth harvesting.

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    1. Fatima Fakier avatar

      Hahaha true! Maybe that’s why they’re in a hurry…

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  12. Dale avatar

    Well that did not go where I thought it would
    Oh my!!!

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  13. Nobbinmaug avatar

    Now, I want to know what he’s doing with these organs. Black market? Saving his sister who desperately needs a kidney? Feeding them to his pet iguana? Hosting a feast for cannibals? Intriguing.

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  14. pennygadd51 avatar

    Clever story. We always associate doctors with healing, but of course a few of them go over to the dark side, and that’s so unusual that it makes your twist very powerful. What makes it even better is the way the setting – time and place – prepares us emotionally for the twist.
    Nice write!

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  15. JoHawkTheWriter avatar

    Ooo, gruesome undercurrents here. Nicely done.

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  16. James McEwan avatar

    I like how you built the tensions, a Doctor a body and possibly still alive to be saved – than wham. Reminds me of the Burke and Hare murders in Edinburgh, but here we have a delivery by train – nice.

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  17. Tannille avatar

    Ooo I want more. Fantastic twist!

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  18. msjadeli avatar

    Gruesome! You just never know….

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  19. Margaret avatar

    That was a shock. I was totally misled and totally surprised at the twist in the end of this. Well told.

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  20. Abhijit Ray avatar

    No wonder the doctor took all the trouble to drive on a dark chilly morning!

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  21. Brenda's Thoughts avatar

    Great twist, Fatima! I wasn’t expecting that. A very cleaver story.

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  22. jillyfunnell avatar

    In the midst of life, huh. Good story, Fatima.

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