Hitting the nail on the head

PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot

“I can’t believe you bought this. Are you trying to sink us?”

There was a time when she used to love everything I did.

“It’s seen better days.” Things have not been the same between us since…. “I’m trying to move us forward.”

She sighed.

“Okay, I get it. Roller shutter doors are not conventional coffee shop decor. But that’s what will be so great about it. Think industrial. Like an upmarket New York loft. Nothing a coat of paint won’t fix.

“Some things can’t just be covered up and forgotten about, Elliot. Some things can’t be fixed. ”

98 words

Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Write a story in 100 words or less. Click the blue frog to submit your flash fiction, and read others’.

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Keith’s Ramblings

Nov 15, 2019

Oh, ye of little faith. This could be just what they need – or not!

Here’s my story!

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neilmacdon

Nov 15, 2019

Oh I don’t know. I an age where truth can be upcycled and repurposed, he may have a point

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Darnell Cureton

Nov 15, 2019

In this relationship, one is trying to fix it. The other is not. Only the two together can repair it. Let’s hope they do. – good story –

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pennygadd51

Nov 15, 2019

I really like this story, Fatima. The metaphor in which the derelict building represents the couple’s relationship is a powerful and economical way of describing the hurt felt by the woman and the superficial understanding of this held by Elliot.
“You just don’t get it, Elliot!”

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Iain Kelly

Nov 15, 2019

I’m not sure if the negative attitude is valid or realistic. Either way, they don’t seem keen on the investment. Good story.

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granonine

Nov 15, 2019

She’s right. Some things just can’t be fixed.

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Dale

Nov 15, 2019

Well… if both are not willing to participate, they are doomed…Let us hope he can get her enthused….

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James McEwan

Nov 16, 2019

Love the metaphor here, and the fact things can not be covered up and forgotten.

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rochellewisoff

Nov 16, 2019

Dear Fatima,

A bit of a heart-breaker. You leave me wondering what has happened. Nicely written.

Shalom,

Rochelle

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magarisa

Nov 16, 2019

Well-written, understated tale. You show us the precarious state of their relationship without spelling it out, and I can’t help wondering how things will work out for them.

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Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

Nov 17, 2019

Oh…. there is something really bad that has happened… better part now.

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Abhijit Ray

Nov 18, 2019

They have moved apart. Things will be difficult to fix. Someone has to make the adjustment.

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