Flipped

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Egg yolk dripped down the Range Rover’s windscreen. Sweat dripped down the side of Joanna’s face. Turned out hurling eggs was tiring. Would the sight of his egg-covered car be enough to make Nick’s blood boil? A part of her felt bad. But, Nick should know his cheating days are over.

Joanna knew she could make him happier than that cow ever did. His indecisiveness drove her mad. That’s why she had to help him decide. Leave your wife, Nick. Choose me. I told you she was crazy, Nick. See what she did to your car?

Joanna threw another egg.

100 words

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Written for Friday Fictioneers hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Write a story in 100 words or less. Click the frog to submit your flash fiction and read what others’ have written.

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Stine Writing

Jun 25, 2020

That is a great story! So brief yet is says so much! Funny because I have an idea for a book I want to write and it is around “cheating”. Since that is kind of cliche for a book I have to figure out a good twist for the plot. Have a good day!

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 25, 2020
  
  Hi there! Thank you so much for you kind feedback. I’m still learning the craft of storytelling myself so it’s always really nice to read positive comments. Cheating is common in books, true. But I think you’re off to a great start in working out a more complex plot. Good Luck and Happy Writing.
  
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neilmacdon

Jun 25, 2020

Beautifully crafted

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 25, 2020
  
  Thank you so much, Neil!
  
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draliman

Jun 25, 2020

I’m not sure Joanna’s the best judge of who’s crazy 🙂

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 25, 2020
  
  haha! True, she doesn’t have the bird’s eye view on that.
  
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plaridel

Jun 25, 2020

if joanna isn’t careful, the egg would be on her face.

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 25, 2020
  
  I don’t think it will end well, either.
  
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rochellewisoff

Jun 25, 2020

Dear Fatima,

Draliman took the words right from under my fingers. I’d say Joanna doesn’t have a lot of room to call Nick’s wife crazy. 😉 Well crafted story from the other woman’s POV.

Shalom,

Rochelle

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 25, 2020
  
  Yep, she is definitely the one who flipped in the story. Thank you for the amazing feedback. I’m so thrilled!
  
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Anthony North

Jun 25, 2020

Nice one. Joanna’s quite a live wire.

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 25, 2020
  
  Definitely dangerous to be around. Thank you, Anthony.
  
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Iain Kelly

Jun 25, 2020

Nick can sure pick ’em… He would be well advised to cut all ties with Joanna I think.

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 26, 2020
  
  He picked an egg-head alright!
  
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doodletllc

Jun 26, 2020

Seems like he is going to get way more than he bargained for…good!

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 26, 2020
  
  Karma’s so good like that isn’t she?
  
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paulasuebryant

Jun 26, 2020

Haha! Sunnyside up from now on. Great revenge tale.

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 26, 2020
  
  Thank you, Paula!
  
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subroto

Jun 26, 2020

I liked the twist in the end, I fear Joanna’s brains are scrambled by rage.

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 26, 2020
  
  Haha! Thank you!
  
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Eugenia Parrish Author

Jun 26, 2020

“I dug my key into the side
Of his pretty little souped-up four-wheel drive
Carved my name into his leather seats
I took a Louisville slugger to both head lights
I slashed a hole in all four tires
Maybe next time he’ll think before he cheats.”

I have always loved this song — and now it’s stuck in my head for the day — but you’ve definitely given it a new twist! Good writing job.

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 29, 2020
  
  Amazing! I actually had that song in my head as I wrote it. Thanks, Eugenia.
  
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James McEwan

Jun 27, 2020

Ah, Nick you messed up. Best to get out before it is too late – these women are crazy.

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 29, 2020
  
  He will reap what he sowed!
  
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msjadeli

Jun 28, 2020

Tricky plot there. Who knows how far she’s willing to take it! Sounds like Fatal Attraction. Good writing with a good twist.

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 29, 2020
  
  I think she’s just getting started. Thank you!
  
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  1. msjadeli
    
    Jun 29, 2020
    
    🙂
    
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Dale

Jun 29, 2020

This was so good, Fatima (I didn’t even realise this was you!)

I’m thinking he should stay way… she is not firing n all cylinders…

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1. Fatima Fakier
  
  Jun 29, 2020
  
  Errr Thanks, Dale, I think! Haha! Seriously though I appreciate the awesome feedback. Getting my game on!
  
  She’s definitely misfiring on something. Keep far away.
  
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  1. Dale
    
    Jun 29, 2020
    
    No, no. I meant your blog! You changed it.
    Looks nice. 😊
    
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  2. Fatima Fakier
    
    Jun 29, 2020
    
    Oh! Thank you, Dale. It is evolving 😉
    
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Laurie Bell

Jul 2, 2020

I love the visual of the egg dripping and the sweat dripping down her face! There is a steaminess coming through in her anger and heat! Beautifully done

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